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Knife by ~unluckysillyboy:iconunluckysillyboy:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Open


like a knife dulls
cutting into a sponge

a mind dulls
trying to break through
the skin of ones peers

one must carefully
choose the victim of
philosophy as not to destroy
the tool of its delivery
©2003-2009 ~unluckysillyboy
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Author's Comments

This is really pompus but I'm really just frustrated with life. Tell me what you think. No lies.

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~reveriesmash Nov 30, 2003, 7:43:09 PM
you bordered the line of angsty teen shit and crossed it gracefully.... to the realm of all that is good teach me! and yes it IS pompous but remember so are you ;)
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~reMeMbeRmeNot Nov 30, 2003, 8:42:00 PM
what i think (void of lies):

you're right. 100% right. pompous ass or not, the last four lines of this poem should be a quote...

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hmCm
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~unluckysillyboy Nov 30, 2003, 9:02:55 PM
Thats for the comment your still a liar though

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live to make someone happy
even if it is just yourself
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~unluckysillyboy Nov 30, 2003, 9:03:31 PM
Thanks for the comment you need to start posting agian

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live to make someone happy
even if it is just yourself
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~Worker-of-art Nov 30, 2003, 9:46:34 PM
LJ,
You are a person who is completely devoid of any trace of humility. Having said that, this is really good. The best part is what reMeMbeRmeNot said. I would not have been surprised if that last line were to have been said by a well-known poet. Don't let that go to your head though, seeing as that will probably be the only good thing that you'll write all year. Lol. ;-)
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~aicanaro Dec 1, 2003, 3:34:12 AM
i guess this has already been said - but the last lines are great.

perhaps the first two verses could have been fused together - maybe its just me, but they seems a bit too forced, as if u just seperated them to keep continuity in the size of the verses. just an opinion, though

./aicanaro

<rant that should be in signature> why am i on the comp? i've got a history exam tomorrow, for crying out loud! may have something to do with the fact that i've got Homeworld2 *dances in joy* </rant>

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To be.

Proud member of ~ livingpoetsociety and ~ the-gimp
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~aicanaro Dec 1, 2003, 3:46:27 AM
sorry - should be *dances with joy*

jesus...

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To be.

Proud member of ~ livingpoetsociety and ~ the-gimp
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~unluckysillyboy Dec 1, 2003, 7:20:33 PM
Thanks for the comment I might have to check out some of your stuff.

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live to make someone happy
even if it is just yourself
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